200 Foot Memes Square

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Come in my living tomb
Old Navy senior sale
Ten by twenty foot room

My window, children bloom
Febreze soaks up the stale
Come in my living tomb

Next store old bride new groom
Hammering Trojan nails
Ten by twenty foot room

Memories, weeping womb
Dyson cleans up, prevails
Come in my living tomb

Expecting the word gloom
Westinghouse lamps unveil
Ten by twenty foot room

Sleeping soon, don’t exhume
Ambien does not fail
Come in my living tomb
Ten by twenty foot room

© 2011 Michael Yost

Cabrillo HS seen through the window

Where Glee does outside taping of shows.

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22 responses to “200 Foot Memes Square

  1. interesting, the repetition of those two sentences really tie the poem together vary well

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  2. wow…some vivid imagery…and solemn despair mixed nicely…

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  3. Cool and modern. Nice write!

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  4. Very effective use of the villanelle form–and a well-written piece of real substance also.

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  5. Modern villanelle. Loved the repetition and the subject matter Michael, know how difficult these are to get right! Thank you for sharing

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  6. Hi Michael

    10X20 foot room.. what a vivid thought…. and the atmosphere that you have captured here… thanks for sharing..

    ॐ नमः शिवाय
    Om Namah Shivaya
    http://shadowdancingwithmind.blogspot.com/2011/02/whispers-another-kind-of-valentines-day.html

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  7. I’d rather be in your room-tomb than be subjected to Glee. Nice piece!

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  8. You totally rock the modern villanelle.

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  9. WOWW!!! It’s got form, feeling, rhyme and reason!!!
    I really like your 10×20 tomb-room, Michael… whheeww… it looks like a sanctuary to me!!!

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  10. I read this a week ago and I love it. It’s really good.

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  11. I can completely “feel” your ten by twenty foot room, with its past just oozing from the walls.

    Thank you for your kind words on my blog. I really appreciate them.

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  12. Solid description piece. I usually like a sense of ‘movement’ in my work, but this worked.

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