Lines white and fine
Tiny bridges to the shrine
Big head or dead line
© 2011 Michael Yost
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The second line functions nicely as passage for the initial white “lines” to the more prominent ones with that twist of wordplay at the end. Well penned Senryu.
You too have a way with words… whether composing or critiquing.
ha, love that last line…nicely played senryu
Thanks Bri. Liked your version of Depeche Mode too!
Nice twist at the end
Makes for good copy eh? smiles…